Boruch Fishman Member hat eine Frage gestellt. KDP University. Deutsch Show menu. KDP Forum Home. Social Share:. Mai 6, um AM. I Need Honest Feedback on My First Novel. Tell me my novel stinks. Tell me my grammar is atrocious. Tell me my book should be taken off the web. Tell me I should pay others to read it. Tell me what you really think; I promise I'll take your feedback like a man. I checked the Look Inside and found the story interesting. Having been to Vegas many times There are some glitches in the Table of Contents that tend to make one cautious, different font sizes, only minor but you can easily fix them. There's also some formatting problems, also easily remedied - just check the book on your Kindle especially the Look Inside portion - probably best done by viewing on line - remember the LI is somewhat odd in the way ti presents These minor problems tended to be a put-off, so remedying them should be a priority. Looks like a good story - nice cover BTW, so stick with it. Don't be hesitant to improve the book where you can - one of the advantages of ebooks. Cheers Ned You can take off the blindfold now and extinguish the cigarette - the firing squad's gone home to their wives and mistresses I swear Edited las vegas does escort mean sex Ned Kelly on May 15, PM. Erm- Teen and Young Adult? Boy was I sheltered as a child! Action Adventure? I do not think that category means what you think it means. And your blurb is confusing. At first I thought it the escort service was some sort of "sex counseling" for couples. The whole son finding father and lost daughter bit confuses me. I'm not really sure what this book is about. Your cover promises something interesting. The pitch and your categories confuse me and make me click away. ETA: Who is your target audience? Edited by: Diana Persaud on May 6, PM. Hi Dianna, Thank-you for your comments. Based on your suggestions, I will remove my book from Teen and Young Adult and from Adventure. Do you have any suggestions about which categories my book belongs in? Also I changed my introduction to be more specific. It now reads: "You've heard of the Girlfriend Experience Escort GEE? Now, Venus Escorts of Las Vegas is taking elite escorts to the next level and offering the Marriage Experience Escort MEE. The escort date starts Thursday with a quickie Las Vegas marriage and ends Sunday at noon. On Monday the marriage is officially dissolved with a quickie Las Vegas divorce. Find out what happens when this new escort service rolls out on the market. For now I will leave out anything about the adoption reunion subplots. The presence of such themes in novels about brothels is not new though. They appeared in "Moll Flanders.
I take full credit or discredit for that. It sounds like it will genuinely work. Have you ever heard of head-hopping? Without reading your book, I have no idea what category to place the book in. What is POV, how important is it in writing, is what you are now asking yourself? Dezember
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Prostitution under Article is defined as engaging in or offering to engage in sexual acts in exchange for money or other forms of compensation. The offense. prostitution is not legal in las lustfrauen.de is legal in pahrump, which is a short drive away. i m 30 min north of la so like northridge area. las vegas has a reputation for sex tourism due to the wild nightlife and the array of sex related workers such as exotic dancers, escorts. of and to in a is " for on that) (with was as it by be: 's are at this from you or i an he have ' not - which his will has but we they all their were. the,.The agency kept getting taken down. KDP University. Alle Rezensionen ins Deutsche übersetzen. I do not think that category means what you think it means. Kudo's to the author for telling her story. This occurs when a reader finds himself suddenly observing the action from another character's point of view. Tell me my grammar is atrocious. Back to top. Don't be hesitant to improve the book where you can - one of the advantages of ebooks. If you paid them go ask for your money back. Boy was I sheltered as a child! Having been to Vegas many times Sergio is hospitalized, and after impregnating a patient, he recovers sufficiently to be discharged. Having been to Vegas many times She's getting it on with a powerful man she doesn't love to get herself and her family or her people a leg up on things. I believe a lot of people get trapped into unwanted marriages. So there were no orgasms for Jami during her ten years of sex work in Las Vegas. Yes, Jonathan, it's alright having an IQ to brag about LOL but a great disadvantage if you don't know how to apply all that knowledge. Without reading your book, I have no idea what category to place the book in. If it weren't, a fifth of all romance books would be about hookers, and I am pretty sure they're not. You seem to be an intelligent and creative writer, but I'm not sure you understand the nature of fiction from what you wrote about blending fiction and non-fiction. My book is in select, and I will take your suggestion about the borrows. Great book club pick! I mentioned it to the director of the agency , but she thought it would be impractical. I dropped ecstasy several times a day…and drank from night till morning. Beliebte Taschenbuch-Empfehlungen des Monats. What is POV, how important is it in writing, is what you are now asking yourself? Good to see you back, Boruch. Like, renting a dog to see if you like being a dog owner, without even knowing if you like dogs. She not only had her heart in the business she had a caring heart for the women she managed and worked with as well as for many of the clients she served. Making the hooker a guy really doesn't help. Peace, James. I show up for an hour, have sex, and leave. Social Share:. That is, certain parts of all novels are based on facts, e. The loners, the folks who don't have strong people skills.
